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FMA:TLT Chap.1Pg.1 by Bitter-Cherry FMA:TLT Chap.1Pg.1 by Bitter-Cherry
READ FROM RIGHT TO LEFT.

Finally, the first page of our doujinshi! (:iconscarleth-jade:'s and mine)

Fullmetal Alchemist: The Last Threat
Set after the manga.

Aaaaand that's it for now.

Espaņol!--->

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Fullmetal Alchemist (c) Hiromu Arakawa
Fullmetal Alchemist:The Last Threat (c) :iconpriscy-elric: & :iconscarleth-jade:
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:iconeverybodyluvskitties:
ASFSHF JSFKA DFL JGH S AKFG KGL OH MAH GAWD!1!!111 Am I dreaming here? Eeep! I'm so excited~ *calms self* Wowwwww! So when will the full story be out? (I will FORCE my mom to buy this no matter what!) And will Priscilla be in it? Or will Ed be married to Winry? How about Al and Mei-Chang? What's gonna happen in the story? I'm asking too many questions here! I'm just excited! I hope you keep going with this because I'm super duper mega excited for this! :iconbiggrinplz: Keep up the good work sweetie! :iconchuplz: *giggles madly like an insane yaoi fangirl*
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uomie Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist
great!
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:icontsumerai-kyon:
Tsumerai-Kyon Featured By Owner May 23, 2011
You did the draw? Awesome, i don't do doujins because my draw is not the same as the authors.
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner May 29, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Well of course I did lol.
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:icontsumerai-kyon:
Tsumerai-Kyon Featured By Owner May 29, 2011
I really think it's cool have someone to draw doujins that knows the author's style XD I'm looking for digimon and naruto drawstyles to do doujins, i could try but everytime i try i ending up doing it wrong and messing with my original style x .x
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compa16 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2011
aww this is amazing looks like it came right out of the manga i must read more...is your oc gonna be in this?
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! :heart:
Yes she is.
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:iconcompa16:
compa16 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011
yay dose happy dance
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2011  Student Digital Artist
LOL
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fmabigfan Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011  Student Digital Artist
wow...amazing, i wish i could read this^^
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011  Student Digital Artist
:D Thanks! Oh what do you mean by that?
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:iconfmabigfan:
fmabigfan Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2011  Student Digital Artist
well, your doujinshi, i wish i could read that^^
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Lol well it's here for everybody to read innit?
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:iconfreetoobsess2fma:
FreeToObsess2FMA Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011  Student General Artist
Wait, I'm pretty sure that's you in the back wearing the jacket...
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011  Student Digital Artist
LOL No XD
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:iconrathenal:
rathenal Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You draw Ed so well! :)
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! :D
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:iconrathenal:
rathenal Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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:iconmangax3me:
MangaX3me Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Waah~ Ed looks so freaking hooot... OwO' Can't wait to see more of this doujinshi! <3
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
:la:
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:iconholycowworshipper:
HolyCowWorshipper Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2011  Hobbyist
Oh god this looks fabulous. I simply can't wait for more!
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! :hug:
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Beijsha Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2011
coolies, looks good so far (luv ur artwork! looks just like the actual manga! =D ) i gotta question, is it also set after the movie? anywayz i'm lookin forward to seeing the rest! =)
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! :D
Well yeah, because the movie is set before ending.
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AwkwardApartment Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
awesome!!!!
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! :D
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AnimeEmm Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Professional Artist
Awwwwwwwwww that's cool! I wish I have a program that can do comics like that and all if u know what I mean by that. :D
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
:giggle: thanks.
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:iconanimeemm:
AnimeEmm Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Professional Artist
no prob :D
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:icontakunichan:
TakuniChan Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Student General Artist
HEY EDWARD. NICE TO SEE YOU AROUND THESE PARTS.
...Now get naked you blonde bastard.
XD
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Ed: O.o b-but... it's cold in here...?
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:icontakunichan:
TakuniChan Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student General Artist
NO NO NO YOU GOTTA GET NEKKID. I NEED MONEY, AND THERE ARE SOME HUNGRY RABID FANGIRLS WITH PLENTY TO SPEND.
NOW GET TO WORK YOU BLONDE BOOTY-CALL. :D
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Ed: D:

Me: *looks in her wallet...empty* DAMNIT!!!
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:icontakunichan:
TakuniChan Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2011  Student General Artist
:iconohnoesplz:
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NyaNii-San Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Student Digital Artist
If I had the money to critique, I would. But I don't, so I can't.

But overall, this really does look professional! (Not like anyone hasn't said that in the coments before, haha. I'm not very original.)

I don't know how long exactly you've been working on art in a japanese comic form (not including your wonderful Harvest Moon and other comic strips), but this is amazing for the first page. I really like the water mixing with the sky in the first panel, and how similar (but not exactly the same) your style is to Miss. Arakawa's.

It doesn't have the harsher, bolder lines like hers, and though I prefer it that way, it separates your original work.

One thing that I' like to see in later pages (This is just the first one, so I haven't really given you a lot of room to work in, haha) would be more background detail. As an artist, I hate backgrounds. I don't like creating them. But as a reader, I enjoy just the thought of the artist detailing trees or inking every line on a skyscaper.

Another on just this page: The angle from the train window. It doesn't make sense. Not unless, of course, you meant for it to be two different panels entirely, which was what I thought at first glance. But I took a closer look, and now the perspective is killing me.

P.s.- I love your poses already, and I've only seen this page. ♥♥♥ If you could reply with your imput on whether or not this was helpful, I'd appreciate it. : )
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Thanks. :D

First try in fact. ^^;
It's good to know it looks similar because it's not exactly my style but we want this to look similar.

We'll take that into account. :D

We're both self taught artists, it hasn't been long since I started working with perspectives but we're gonna try to fix these mistakes , once we're done with the first chapter.

Yes it's been helpful, thanks. :D
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Pan-Zareta Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
It looks really professional.
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! :D
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tobeamused Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Student General Artist
Awesome! This looks really authentic. I can't wait to see where it goes. ^.^
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! :D
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tobeamused Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Student General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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boboborocks Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Student General Artist
:eager: I really want to see where you go with this!
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
:D
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stufss135 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011
>u< I have to agree with :iconeverybodyluvskitties: :D
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
:love:
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OokamiOki Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011
hmmm
My thought on doujinshi is....yaoi.
I know this probably isn't going to be yaoi because I have never seen you draw anything like that.
Im still curious about the pairing though. X3
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
LOL no it's not, heh. XD
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:iconamaya-redfern:
Amaya-Redfern Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:D Yay~
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:iconbitter-cherry:
Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
:la:
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AveriaAlexandros Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2011
(I'd write a critique, but I have no money for Premium Membership D: )

:iconilavplz: *squee*
OHGODYOUEARNEDAWATCHBECAUSEICAN'TDAREMISSINGEVENASINGLEPANELOFTHISOMG-
(And now I hate myself because, unlike your doujinshi, my fixfic is 0% done D: )

Okay, the fangirl moment's over, now to the SRS things...

I think Ed's antenna is too damn small D: It needs to be at least a bit longer, IMHO.
Second, maybe's just me, but I think Ed looks a bit weird in the last panel... I don't know, maybe's the mouth.

But overall, this is nice, and really resembles the manga.
I like how the reading is right to left too, it surely helps thinking it's some kind of sequel/spin-off.
Another good thing, Ed's HAWT in there 8D ( but then again, when he wasn't in your works? =D )

In short, nice job, like always, just some things that seem a bit off (but maybe it's just me XD)!

I read the Spanish version too and I understood it, and probably even better than the English version. I feel so SPESHUL XD
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Bitter-Cherry Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Yeah I fixed it, the kind of thing you don't notice right away but when you've already uploaded it.
Hmmm I dunno, but I think Scarlet would've told me.

:3 Heh well I'm glad you like it.

:giggle: I can relate.
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